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The Absence of God by ~twistedsyns:icontwistedsyns:

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Isn't it extremely odd,
The absence of the one called God.
He doesn't listen to our every prayer,
How he doesn't even seem to care.

Why does an innocent child pass away,
While a murderer lives on to live another day?
Where is he when somebody takes there life,
Or when a husband beats his wife?

Every year the world slips farther into hell,
Will he show up again, time will only tell.
Did he create earth and just turn away,
Or was it an accident, just a child at play.

If there is a judgement day,
I might fall on my knees and pray.
Until then I think of God as folklore.
He created the earth, then did nothing more.
©2008-2010 ~twistedsyns
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A poetry submission for the "The Poetry Competition Returns" [link]

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`Flutterings Jan 23, 2008, 8:18:51 AM
Thanks for entering, good luck

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Mood: Anger `Flutterings Jan 23, 2008, 11:24:30 AM
I like this poem, its questioning and thoughtful. I LOVE the last line. That was brilliance.

The only line that is questionable is

How he never listens to our every prayer,

It just doesnt seem to sound right.

He never listens to our every prayer.

He doesn't listen to our every prayer might work better. Think about it. :}

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www.kathrynjeanes.com ♥
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~twistedsyns Jan 23, 2008, 5:51:13 PM
Thank you. I certainly will take those two lines into consideration. :blackrose:

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No light, inside for me to shine on today
Nothing but darkness in me
Darkness, night time
No moon in the sky tonight
Feeling like our lives been tucked away, today
Life is darkness, forever remain, and again
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~Grimchongo Jan 23, 2008, 8:01:06 PM
I applaud this work, especially the theme to it heh and how most of it is simply reality. Reminds me of the song "Dear your Holiness" by Bayside as well...I hope you win, this is a good view of religion and poetry heh

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"Every white knight in shining armor is just another black knight underneath, only difference is the black knight knows what he's become"
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Mood: Satisfied ~bmbx Jan 23, 2008, 11:09:46 PM
nice thoughts and also a realistic theme:D

hope you've come up more:D

wishing you the best!!!
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~twistedsyns Jan 24, 2008, 6:38:12 AM
Thank you! I have never heard of that song but I will look it up. :blackrose:

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No light, inside for me to shine on today
Nothing but darkness in me
Darkness, night time
No moon in the sky tonight
Feeling like our lives been tucked away, today
Life is darkness, forever remain, and again
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~twistedsyns Jan 24, 2008, 6:41:54 AM
I am currently working on a couple more. Thank you! :blackrose:

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No light, inside for me to shine on today
Nothing but darkness in me
Darkness, night time
No moon in the sky tonight
Feeling like our lives been tucked away, today
Life is darkness, forever remain, and again
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*Bahama-dreams Jan 25, 2008, 6:48:10 PM
Great subject and point of view, nicely written.

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~twistedsyns Jan 25, 2008, 7:02:06 PM
Thank you very much! :blackrose:

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No light, inside for me to shine on today
Nothing but darkness in me
Darkness, night time
No moon in the sky tonight
Feeling like our lives been tucked away, today
Life is darkness, forever remain, and again
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